Editing activity (sorry I COMPLETELY FORGOT ABOUT THIS!!!!)

seven things they did:
1) intricate details including the position of people around them etc
2) ending with a story and a part of the sentence
3) Picking stories from various parts of their lives but still having a flow
4) Dramatic diction and action verbs
5) Animated dialogues to paint a vivid image
6) avoiding summary but letting the scenes talk for themselves
7) tactful presentation of a focus

five things i did:
1) less summary and more descriptive details
2) didnt talk about the claim i was making but instead let my stories speak for themselves
3) picked certain specific scenes instead of many different scenes since it loses focus
4) tried to use much more dialogue to describe the scene
5) didnt blatantly point to claim

Evaluation proposal

http://www.associatedcontent.com/article/32644/how_has_the_harry_potter_phenomenon.html
- The article talks about the cultural impact of Harry potter on society. I will use it to show effects harry potter has had on children's lives and the way they think for the better

http://edition.cnn.com/2008/SHOWBIZ/books/03/25/cnnu.potter/
- The article describes how colleges have used harry potter in their curriculum. It shows how far-reaching the effects of harry potter are since the book is being used for serious academics.

http://www.usnews.com/usnews/culture/articles/050725/25read.htm
- the article talks about how harry potter revived reading. I will use it to show how it has completely changed the face of the teen novel genre.

I am evaluating the Harry Potter franchise as a force that has changed youth literature using its presence not just through books but through games (quidditch), movies and amusement parks and exhibits to establish it as game changer and face changer of youth literature. 

GAGA THE MOTHER MONSTER

Some arguments made about Lady Gaga include the idea that she is an asexual. The author comments that since she has made being sexy a very processed and unnatural she has made completely not attractive and this become asexual. They feel that her being fake and in effect affected society as a whole and given rise to a paucity of sexual revolutionis-esque feeling in todays youth. 

Freewrite cultural objects

1. Magic has always fascinated us. From the days of alchemy society has always been obsessed with the power of sorcery. When JK Rowling's "Harry Potter" was released it caused a new wave of witches and wizards. Where in the past most were cursed and seen in a bad light, Rowling created an intricate world of wizadry that captivated audiences all over the world of all ages. Apart from the expected fan fiction any book that receives mass appeal would generate, Harry Potter had its own amusement, 8 movies (for 7 books), it's own radio stations, WIZrock, exhibitions and even a quidditch world cup. It has affected the very dying teen genre and sparked a flur of magic oriented books, movies and soaps.

2. I like Big Butts and I cannot lie. Having a big butt is a new thing. One cannot avoid a little shaking of the butt in today's mainstream music. But it does not stop there. Today there are toning shoes, made FOR the butt and butt pads to give a girl's butt a "lift". Rap after rap is made about the rear end of a woman and all women magazines focus on specifically getting a better "butt".

3. Relationships were something to be delicate, personal and made a person vulnerable. But today it is used by main stream music to get people to listen to their music. 

Peer review reflection

This time I felt the peer review session was extremely helpful. My editor pointed out to the various sections of my essay where I could have focused on a particular point or made the story more interesting. He also told me where I could cut out excessive description and detail which doesn't support my claim.
Nevertheless, I felt that reading my editors paper helped me more since I felt that his essay truly embodied the narrative essay. It taught me how to make dialogue an essential part of the argument. His paper also showed me how to tactfully include a message without being obvious.

Disappointing Dinner

Since I usually go a whole day without a real meal, needless to say, dinner is my most sumptuous. I entered the dining hall with extremely high expectations. Unfortunately past the salad and fruit bar (which I have grown tired of) everything seemed either unfamiliar or tasteless. My mother is a pure vegitarian thus I am only used to various Indian dishes on a daily basis, and though my father, brother and I eat meat when we're out, I'm pretty new to the meat world. Thus the array of meat filled dishes didn't particularly excite me. I stuck with the boring old simply chick breast, some coleslaw and fries. I began with my salad that had leaves today rather than lettuce. That combined with my favorite fungi, mushrooms and cheese. All together it was a pleasurable salad experience making me feel good both physically and mentally since I felt I had made a healthy decision. The fruit bowl was my favorite since the chocolate pudding mixed with pineapples and the sort really made everything so much more tastier. When I finally got to my "main" course, I knew it was going to be a let down. I knew they couldn't go wrong with the fries so I began with a few and then began chowing down on the grilled chicken breast. It was an average experience, thought the chicken was well cooked, it is there almost every day at the dining halls thus reducing the taste level. The coleslaw was the worst - a little too sweet for my liking. Overall, a disappointing experience for a very hungry stomach.

Narrative Reading Response

1. The heroic essay was written in a completely new way, having many varied thoughts but many commonalities in the end. This was written in such an interesting way but made so much sense with the writer's tone and motive. They did not choose to refer to any great writers but spend a good part of their essay deriving from and describing experiences. I have never read such pieces before.

2. In "And the Hero will drown", the author describes so many different experiences that show how being a "hero" has negatively affected his life. The purpose to propose this idea that heroes can, in fact, do harm while trying to save the world. This is apparent from the myriad of experiences described and the audience seems to be anyone such as teachers, counselors etc. who often find themselves putting themselves "out there" for others, many times not recieving the conclusion they desired.